I’ve wanted this for a really long time… I know…. Wizard
Dialogue from the scene where Juno and Bleeker have sex for the first time…(You don’t know this though, as you’ve never met the characters, you can’t see his face and you have no concept of their relationship).
You could be thinking that this is really cute.. or Diablo Cody is in touch with the youth slang of the day… or … who really knows… or who really cares for this matter…
The point is this that it’s a girl taking her panties off and mounting a guy on a chair to have sex. The whole point of cinema is not the images in front of you but the images and story you create in your head. Done right, this can be extremely powerful, but maybe not in this case.
The 11 words of dialogue above, and the subtext, take this scene and render it as an encounter of two people who care about each other. Turn the sound down and watch the scene again and you realise that it’s open for interpretation.
Every word of dialogue, whether consumed consciously or subconsciously, impacts the scene you write and the context of the story you tell.